NaNoWriMo: Chapter 15

Just finished level 14/Chapter 15 of my Portal novelization.  ^_^  Just made up some lost ground, but still not quite at the word count I need.

Not too fond of this chapter, but I don't really like the level either.

Please give me any crit/advice/comments you have towards this chapter!  Thank you!


Chapter notes:

14

-Dreaaaadddd writing this levellllllll.  *whine*
-Some of the beginning wording seems funky.
-Beginning description is a bit odd.  :|
-Starting 2 paragraphs in a row with "There" looks and sounds dumb, but I don't know a better way to phrase it.  :|
-Do I need to recap all the danger squares every time?  Seems like just fillerrrrr, so I'm going to stop, except in cases with new information.
-Ha ha, gamma leaking, Chell will now be the new She-Hulk.  XD
-Describing the area around the pit looks odd.  :|
-Does the sarcasm come off weird?
-D:  Need another word for platform, it's too repetitive.  :|

-Outside resources:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Gamma_ray


( Pass on Through to Chapter 15 )

Chapter Word Count:  1,875
Total Word Count:  22,656