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mewtwowarrior) wrote2010-11-01 11:25 pm
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NaNoWriMo: Chapter 2
Just finished level 01/Chapter 2 for the Portal novelization. I'm not really happy with this chapter because the level is short and sort of repetitive. There's nothing new to introduce or talk about, and I fear that maybe I put in some out of character bits and repetitive stuff. I'm just not sure what to think of it. :| It took like no time at all to write though, so I guess that means I'll have more time to write the good stuff. XD I procrastinated a bit today, so if I get started a little earlier tomorrow, I might get more done.
I'd love any input you have towards this chapter. <3
Chapter notes:
01
-Number 01 or numbers 01? Which one is correct? There's two numbers but they make one number...
-Is Chell thinking about the long names of the cube and the button unnecessary or out of character? It feels off to me somehow. Also had to look up a synonym for important so I didn't overuse it. XD
-I'm trying to not repeat things I mentioned in the last chapter, but everything looks similar. :|
-Ugh, this feels so repetitive, it is the same thing over and over, I hope it's not too boring to read. :<
-Parts of it feel like it has awkward wording...
-Is there too much use of the word "wait"? Changed one instance to "watch" but it feels off.
-This chapter was a little frustrating to write, I hope it's not frustrating to read. :|
-Such a short level D: I did my best to make it a good length, not too short and not too padded with unneeded blahblahblah. Right now the levels/chapters are shorter than my goals, but I did have a bit of wiggle room, and I know some of the later levels are crazy complicated and will probably take forever to write. XD It feels bad now that I'm not hitting my goals, but I think some of the later ones are going to kick my butt from here to Iceland. XD Especially the behind the scenes level after sector 19, I plan on splitting it into 2 because it is INSANE. XD
-Game Nonsense
lol, the portal closed off when I was holding the cube, but I was in the process of sticking it out of the portal, so I was on one side and the cube was on the other XD
-Outside Resources
http://thesaurus.com/browse/important
The new hallway that the elevator opened up to had a shorter ceiling and led directly to larger area with a wall with a grey screen. The lower ceiling prevented Chell from seeing how big the screen was or what contents it might show. The overall appearance of the area looked like the previous rooms, with concrete surrounding on all sides.
Chell stepped out of the elevator and walked towards the screen. As she exited the area with the lower ceiling, the screen lit up. It was a board like the one in the first room. This one had the number 01 in large print at the top and it said it was 01 out of 19. It was one more step towards the finish. However, unlike the previous board, all the squares were greyed out; there were no dangers in this area. She was thankful for that; Chell didn't like the look of some of the possible future problems, though if the last one was true, the cake was something to look forward to.
She turned and walked past the screen, but didn't get very far. There was a steep drop off that overlooked the main are of the room. Directly below her was a medium-sized open area surrounded by three other areas walled off by glass.
The first area was across from her tall perch. It looked to be as wide and long as the open section. On the upper part of the left wall was a window. Across from that, on the right side, was a closed door. Next to the door was a familiar looking blue box with an "X". From what Chell could see, there was an arrow above the door, which meant it was the exit.
Immediately to Chell's right was a camera. The enclosed area below and behind it was not as long as the open section, but it had the same width. It only contained a single cube.
On the left, she could see a room that mirrored the one on the right, although instead of a cube, it held a button. The button was connected to the door like in the other room.
Overall, it felt like a different version of the previous area. However, there were no doors to each section. However, if Chell looked closer, she saw that each enclosed section contained a grey piece of wall like the one the orange portal had appeared on in the glass room. So, portals were going to appear, and she'd have to go from portal to portal to accomplish her goals.
After Chell had finished analyzing the situation, she looked down once more, then jumped down to the level below. The metal springs attached to her knees absorbed the shock from the impact and she landed safely.
As soon as she hit bottom, the voice spoke again, "Please place the Weighted Storage Cube on the Fifteen Hundred Megawatt Aperture Science Heavy Duty Super-Colliding Super Button."
Chell frowned very slightly, that was a lot of unnecessary words just to say 'Put the Cube on the Button.' Why did whoever made this place insist on overlong names for simple things? Oh well, it was their place and they could do what they wanted. And names weren't really important, as long as Chell could figure out what they were talking about, that was the number one thing.
There was a swoosh from behind her, so Chell turned around. She was looking directly into a portal with an orange border to see inside the enclosure with the button.
That wasn't what she needed, though. First, she had to get the cube. There was only the one gateway in the open area; would it swap to the different enclosures?
Chell waited a few seconds and the view changed. This time, she saw the exit door. Nope, still not the right enclosure, but it should come up with the cube one next.
Seconds later, the portal changed again, and her patience was rewarded with the sight of the cube. Chell stepped into the portal with no hesitation and within moments was next to the cube.
Chell grabbed the cube by the ridges between segments, using them as handholds. She picked it up and trudged over to the portal with her prize.
However, because of the bulk of the cube, by the time she reached the portal, it has already closed. No matter though, it would just be a matter of seconds before it opened up again.
Once the portal appeared before her, Chell hefted the cube through, stepping over the portal's bottom edge. She then turned around and waited for it to swap to the button, which, if she remembered correctly, would show up the next time it swapped.
After a moment, the portal changed, and her goal was in sight. She brought the cube through and placed it down on the button with a small sigh of relief. While the cube was not heavy, it was difficult to hold and the straight metal edges had dug into her hands. But, she had accomplished what she needed to do. The button was pressed and lit up, and so was the path to the door.
Now that the button was engaged, the voice instructed Chell again, "Perfect. Please move quickly to the chamberlock, as the effects of prolonged exposure to the Button are not part of this test."
Chell eyed the button warily, if there were possible side effects, she didn't want to stick around any extra than she already had to. Could the button be radioactive?
Well, the end of this area was at hand, she just had to watch for the portal out of this enclosure, and then she'd be away from the button.
Chell didn't have long to wait, and once the blue portal reappeared, she walked through it and out to the main area once more. The next rotation of portals was the last she needed, once it swapped; she stepped through and made her way towards the door.
The door was open and beyond it was another Grid and elevator. Chell stepped into the elevator and waited for it to take her to the next floor.
Chapter Word Count: 1,033
Total Word Count: 3,020
I'd love any input you have towards this chapter. <3
Chapter notes:
01
-Number 01 or numbers 01? Which one is correct? There's two numbers but they make one number...
-Is Chell thinking about the long names of the cube and the button unnecessary or out of character? It feels off to me somehow. Also had to look up a synonym for important so I didn't overuse it. XD
-I'm trying to not repeat things I mentioned in the last chapter, but everything looks similar. :|
-Ugh, this feels so repetitive, it is the same thing over and over, I hope it's not too boring to read. :<
-Parts of it feel like it has awkward wording...
-Is there too much use of the word "wait"? Changed one instance to "watch" but it feels off.
-This chapter was a little frustrating to write, I hope it's not frustrating to read. :|
-Such a short level D: I did my best to make it a good length, not too short and not too padded with unneeded blahblahblah. Right now the levels/chapters are shorter than my goals, but I did have a bit of wiggle room, and I know some of the later levels are crazy complicated and will probably take forever to write. XD It feels bad now that I'm not hitting my goals, but I think some of the later ones are going to kick my butt from here to Iceland. XD Especially the behind the scenes level after sector 19, I plan on splitting it into 2 because it is INSANE. XD
-Game Nonsense
lol, the portal closed off when I was holding the cube, but I was in the process of sticking it out of the portal, so I was on one side and the cube was on the other XD
-Outside Resources
http://thesaurus.com/browse/important
The new hallway that the elevator opened up to had a shorter ceiling and led directly to larger area with a wall with a grey screen. The lower ceiling prevented Chell from seeing how big the screen was or what contents it might show. The overall appearance of the area looked like the previous rooms, with concrete surrounding on all sides.
Chell stepped out of the elevator and walked towards the screen. As she exited the area with the lower ceiling, the screen lit up. It was a board like the one in the first room. This one had the number 01 in large print at the top and it said it was 01 out of 19. It was one more step towards the finish. However, unlike the previous board, all the squares were greyed out; there were no dangers in this area. She was thankful for that; Chell didn't like the look of some of the possible future problems, though if the last one was true, the cake was something to look forward to.
She turned and walked past the screen, but didn't get very far. There was a steep drop off that overlooked the main are of the room. Directly below her was a medium-sized open area surrounded by three other areas walled off by glass.
The first area was across from her tall perch. It looked to be as wide and long as the open section. On the upper part of the left wall was a window. Across from that, on the right side, was a closed door. Next to the door was a familiar looking blue box with an "X". From what Chell could see, there was an arrow above the door, which meant it was the exit.
Immediately to Chell's right was a camera. The enclosed area below and behind it was not as long as the open section, but it had the same width. It only contained a single cube.
On the left, she could see a room that mirrored the one on the right, although instead of a cube, it held a button. The button was connected to the door like in the other room.
Overall, it felt like a different version of the previous area. However, there were no doors to each section. However, if Chell looked closer, she saw that each enclosed section contained a grey piece of wall like the one the orange portal had appeared on in the glass room. So, portals were going to appear, and she'd have to go from portal to portal to accomplish her goals.
After Chell had finished analyzing the situation, she looked down once more, then jumped down to the level below. The metal springs attached to her knees absorbed the shock from the impact and she landed safely.
As soon as she hit bottom, the voice spoke again, "Please place the Weighted Storage Cube on the Fifteen Hundred Megawatt Aperture Science Heavy Duty Super-Colliding Super Button."
Chell frowned very slightly, that was a lot of unnecessary words just to say 'Put the Cube on the Button.' Why did whoever made this place insist on overlong names for simple things? Oh well, it was their place and they could do what they wanted. And names weren't really important, as long as Chell could figure out what they were talking about, that was the number one thing.
There was a swoosh from behind her, so Chell turned around. She was looking directly into a portal with an orange border to see inside the enclosure with the button.
That wasn't what she needed, though. First, she had to get the cube. There was only the one gateway in the open area; would it swap to the different enclosures?
Chell waited a few seconds and the view changed. This time, she saw the exit door. Nope, still not the right enclosure, but it should come up with the cube one next.
Seconds later, the portal changed again, and her patience was rewarded with the sight of the cube. Chell stepped into the portal with no hesitation and within moments was next to the cube.
Chell grabbed the cube by the ridges between segments, using them as handholds. She picked it up and trudged over to the portal with her prize.
However, because of the bulk of the cube, by the time she reached the portal, it has already closed. No matter though, it would just be a matter of seconds before it opened up again.
Once the portal appeared before her, Chell hefted the cube through, stepping over the portal's bottom edge. She then turned around and waited for it to swap to the button, which, if she remembered correctly, would show up the next time it swapped.
After a moment, the portal changed, and her goal was in sight. She brought the cube through and placed it down on the button with a small sigh of relief. While the cube was not heavy, it was difficult to hold and the straight metal edges had dug into her hands. But, she had accomplished what she needed to do. The button was pressed and lit up, and so was the path to the door.
Now that the button was engaged, the voice instructed Chell again, "Perfect. Please move quickly to the chamberlock, as the effects of prolonged exposure to the Button are not part of this test."
Chell eyed the button warily, if there were possible side effects, she didn't want to stick around any extra than she already had to. Could the button be radioactive?
Well, the end of this area was at hand, she just had to watch for the portal out of this enclosure, and then she'd be away from the button.
Chell didn't have long to wait, and once the blue portal reappeared, she walked through it and out to the main area once more. The next rotation of portals was the last she needed, once it swapped; she stepped through and made her way towards the door.
The door was open and beyond it was another Grid and elevator. Chell stepped into the elevator and waited for it to take her to the next floor.
Chapter Word Count: 1,033
Total Word Count: 3,020